The Palace at 4 A.M.
Posted: September 29, 2016 Filed under: Words In Imaginary Motion 8 CommentsShe said:
‘You’ve been on my mind
And even though what’s passed we can’t rewind
Hearing your voice not only makes me smile
But also serves to remind…
How you always made me laugh
With your sweet serenades
I missed this
Just talking and being
Got myself a new man
He doesn’t treat me bad
As a matter of fact he’s very pleasant
But you know how they say change takes time?
I just think nothing ever changes’, she continued
‘Sometimes I just want to quit acting classy and be a little slutty
Come over, maybe spend the night
And even though I know that won’t fix everything
It would satisfy a need… at least for a bit
And what if I did… then just call it a slip
A swim in the Dirty Water on some Marc E. Bassy ish so to speak’, whispering through the phone in a naturally seductive tone
Then we burst out laughing
‘But I know I shouldn’t do that
As much as I want to
Because I know after we…
We’ll still want different things
So I’m going to stay far away from you handsome bird
Let you fly free
I just had to hear your voice’, then she put the phone down
For a moment
I just lay there motionless
My eyes fixed on the Alberto Giacometti print on the wall
And my mind like the moon in free fall
© Heath Muchena, 2016
On The Heath 
This is so full of fun and love and longing. The final line is. It just is. Is. Amazing. And in my mind there’s nothing sexier than a man who makes me laugh so this poem with the middle line bursting out laughing in the middle of all the seriousness of the end is a jewel.
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Hi Sue, I’m so glad you think it’s full of fun and longing. That’s definitely an accurate observation. I’m never sure the stories translate but I try stay as true to them as possible so I’m glad you didn’t think the laughter was misplaced 🙂 thanks for your comment, you’re a treasure xoxo
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Wonderfully real.
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Makes me happy knowing you found some pleasure in it especially seeimg that I can be quite self-critical at times although that makes me laugh to myself often when I write too. Still can never read what I write once I put it out there. I read with as much surprise as any reader the odd time or two I ever find myself having to read my work. Thanks, your comment is encouraging 🙂
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I find your writings present a consistent face. I can’t say exactly what that is but I feel your words and images come from a core being in you. Your writings about female partners have a shroud of mystery that engages me. Your writings about worldly matters are distanced from the everyday but I always get a sense of shared reality. I sense self confidence in your writings where you may be self critical. I hope all this is not too vague. I like your writing because I can’t pin you down. 🙂
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That’s my most treasured review and I will most certainly keep it on record. It’s everything I wished to hear said of my work especially that you highlighted the role feminine characters play – women are central to my work because there’s no higher human form than the womanly and you inspire me infinitely. “Worldly matters distanced from the everyday… shared reality” and “…because you can’t pin me down” – makes all the sense in the world to me and only someone as wise as you can express it in such a way. A way I can understand more than words can validate. Not to go on but I consider you a blessing and you may never fully comprehend your influence on my work but I’ll say right now that your words I will carry with me even past my ability to continue writing. Thank you for everything. Love always
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I didn’t know if what I wrote would hit home with you. Thanks for letting me know. I trust you and felt I could go on my intuition. I’m glad I mirror you. Your comments in our ongoing conversation tell me I’m so much more than my age. You are precious to me. Love always.
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Forever and ever ❤
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